reflection cover letter

Reflection

        In my portfolio I picked the following pieces. “Analyzing a trend”, “This I believe”, “Application” essay, and “Profile” essays. I have picked these pieces of writing because I feel like these pieces are some of my best writing. In all of the pieces there is a significant change from the first draft into the second draft, which I wrote. I feel like the second drafts are good. With all the positive criticism that I got with all these pieces of writing, I made lots of changes to the second drafts and I feel like that the final drafts are the best that I have written.

        “Analyzing a trend” is a piece of writing that I had to include in the portfolio. If it wasn’t a requirement I think I would have still added it to the portfolio. It was an assignment that I found to be challenging, and it was something that I hadn’t done before. I think that my second draft is a good start to what can become something great. Although something’s might be unclear and the essay might be a little everywhere, I feel like I had made lots of changes to the essay to make it the best I could. I used to critique given to me and added as much of it as I could into the essay. I think that my trend was clear.

        In the assignment that we had to write the “profile essay” I feel like that I also did a good job with it. In the beginning I was a little unsure of who to write about, but I think that my second draft was a much better example of the writing. I am including this piece of writing in my portfolio because it was something that I enjoyed writing about and it was someone that is sentimental to me. I picked “someone you look up to” as the topic and my father to me is someone I look up to everyday of my life. Although it really wasn’t that interested to others I feel very strong about this and I bet people have parents that they look up to too.

        “Application essay” is another piece that I have included in my profile. The reason I picked it was because I feel that this is a very important paper.Me getting into a nursing program is very important for me. It is something I always wanted to do even when I was a little kid. So doing this paper was something I really liked doing because I way use this to applied to a nursing program. I understand that in my second draft I had a lot of miss spelling and other little minor errors. But I fixed all of that and I feel very confident about this piece.

        The last piece that I will include in my essay is “This I Believe” essay. This piece of writing is one that I really thought I had done a good job with. I think that family is the most important thing in life, and that is truly what I believe in. Even though my experience with the car and the flat tire. My brother didn’t hold our fight against me , family being the most important thing in life, I still feel like that the fact that my brother was there by my side, he was supportive even though it was my fault meant a lot to me. I used the comments that I received back from that essay and I made it better. Over all I feel like this was a good essay because it was something that I was interested in writing and I had a belief that I feel strongly for.

        The essays that I chose to put in the portfolio I believe are my best writings of the semesters. Also some of these were new to me; I never have writing some of these so it was interesting writing some of these essays. I feel like I did my best with the comments that I received on them to make the essays more appropriate to the assignment, and my final products are the best.

Analyzing a Trend 2nd draft

Alcohol

                The use of alcohol has changed dramatically over the years. Younger kids drink, just to be cool. Alcohol can cause tons of problems when it is over abused. Don’t get me wrong alcohol is ok to drink once in a while when you get together with friends and family but it’s not ok when you’re under age and drinking, and driving around like kids do today. What these young kids don’t know is that alcohol is a very serious matter because it can become addicting after drinking it for a while. Alcohol also destroys your liver, which you can die from it.

        I found this article that talk about alcohol and how younger kids are drinking, especially in the European countries. “Alcoholism is the cause of 7.5% of illness and premature death in the EU. For 15-29 year-olds, however, this proportion climbs to 10% for females and 25% for males. It is the leading cause of death for this age group. More than nine teenagers out of ten have drunk alcohol, beginning at the average age of 12 and a half, notes the document. "In addition to these direct risks, young people are often victims of the secondary effects of alcohol abuse," adds the European Youth Forum, including violence, driving while intoxicated and domestic violence.”

        The rates of deaths from alcohol are increasing every day. “Two out of 3 murders, 1 of 3 rapes, 1 out of 3 suicides, 2 out of 5 assaults, and 3 out of 5 cases of child abuse are connected to the use of alcohol. One out of 2 deaths by fire and drowning are alcohol related, as are 2 out of 5 home accidents. 25,000 American's die in alcohol related crashes every year, or 1 out of 2 fatalities. One out of 2 in-patients in our city hospitals are there because of an alcohol related problem and 40,000 young adults are disfigured by alcohol related car accidents each year.”

        You really don’t know what alcohol can do to you when you drink it because it depends on your body weight, height and couple of other things. But alcohol impairs your judgment. It affects your speech slurred, balance and coordination impaired, reflexes slowed, visual attention impaired, unstable emotions, nausea, vomiting.

        I think that a good solution to this problem would be to step up something up that cops and pull people over and check there alcohol level if they see any signs and even if they don’t see any signs that the person driving is drunk. For example is Portugal on Thursdays, Fridays, Saturdays and Sundays. The cops are down the road from the club and they pull cars over and check to see if they have their licenses and that’s their cars are registered and also they do a breathalyzer test on them. I think that if we do that they would be scared to drink and drive that way we can reduce the number of death from people drinking and driving.

http://www.faadrug.com/alcohol.asp

Full Text: COPYRIGHT 2006 Europolitics

Source Citation

"HEALTH : ACTION PLAN WILL ATTACK ALCOHOLISM AMONG YOUNG PEOPLE." European Social Policy (2006): 64835. Global Issues In Context. Web. 1 May 2012

Post write

I feel very strong about this essay. I really feel that alcohol is a very important thing and that minors shouldn’t be drinking if not 21. I feel like there should be more laws or more ways to prevent it.

Analyzing a Trend 1 draft

Alcohol

                In this article it talks about alcohol and how younger kids are drinking, especially in the European countries. Alcohol is a very serious matter because it because addicting after drinking it for a while. Alcohol also destroys your liver, which you can die from it. “Alcoholism is the cause of 7.5% of illness and premature death in the EU. For 15-29 year-olds, however, this proportion climbs to 10% for females and 25% for males. It is the leading cause of death for this age group. More than nine teenagers out of ten have drunk alcohol, beginning at the average age of 12 and a half, notes the document. "In addition to these direct risks, young people are often victims of the secondary effects of alcohol abuse," adds the European Youth Forum, including violence, driving while intoxicated and domestic violence.”

            What the author is trying to do is to increase the number of kids drinking. Also the number of deaths cause from drinking. “Another key proposal was the document's suggestion for the creation of a zero-rate blood alcohol level in the EU for young and inexperienced drivers. This measure would also concern public transport and drivers of commercial vehicles, particularly those transporting hazardous substances. The Commission hoped with this measure to help slash the number of road deaths in Europe from 50,000 in 2000 to 25,000 by 2010. The communication also urged member states to set up a regulatory framework for blood alcohol testing and sanctions in the EU.”

Full Text: COPYRIGHT 2006 Europolitics

Source Citation

"HEALTH : ACTION PLAN WILL ATTACK ALCOHOLISM AMONG YOUNG PEOPLE." European Social Policy (2006): 64835. Global Issues In Context. Web. 1 May 2012

Post write

I know I need to write more but I just wanted to see how I would lie the topic. Also not really sure, if it’s the topic I want to do.

Annotating a Scholarly Article 2nd draft

Dougherty, Michael Brendan. "Fight of their lives: what anti-abortion activists can expect from an Obama administration." The American Conservative 8.1 (2009): 20+. Global Issues in Context. Web. 16 Apr. 2012.

                                                                        Krystal Bettencourt

Abortion

            In this article he talks about abortions and how it was a major issue in 2008. How people should have the right to do what they want if they want it. Also talks how Barack Obama said that he would change extend to the modest legal protections pro-lifers.  Cardinal Francis Stafford said that Obama's "extremist anti-life platform ... is aggressive, disruptive and apocalyptic." He summed up the dark mood of his fellow activists: "On November 4, 2008, America suffered a cultural earthquake."

                This article is about abortion and how Obama is trying to fight over FOCA. The author has shown both sides of each story, and how the bishop doesn’t want to allow abortions in hospitals. It also shows how abortions should be someone’s person’s choice, not anybody else’s. The author also shows a statistic “in a study published with the conservative Heritage Foundation, estimated that FOCA would result in approximately 125,000 more abortions performed annually.” By professor Michael.

Post write

I feel very strong about this paper because I feel that people should have the right to do what they want. It’s their choice if they want to have a kid or not.

Annotating a Scholarly Article 1 draft

Dougherty, Michael Brendan. "Fight of their lives: what anti-abortion activists can expect from an Obama administration." The American Conservative 8.1 (2009): 20+. Global Issues in Context. Web. 16 Apr. 2012.

                                                                                                          Krystal Bettencourt

            In this article they talk about abortions and how it was a major issue in 2008. How people should have the right to do what they want if they want. Also how Barack Obama said that he would change extends to the modest legal protections pro-lifers.  Cardinal Francis Stafford said that Obama's "extremist anti-life platform ... is aggressive, disruptive and apocalyptic." He summed up the dark mood of his fellow activists: "On November 4, 2008, America suffered a cultural earthquake."

                This article is just about abortion and how Obama is trying to fight over FOCA. The author has shown both sides of each story, on how the bishop don’t want to allow abortions in there hospitals. Also shows how abortions should be someone’s person’s choice, not anybody else’s. The author also shows a statistic “in a study published with the conservative Heritage Foundation, estimated that FOCA would result in approximately 125,000 more abortions performed annually.” By professor Michael.

Post write

I feel very strong about this paper because I feel that people should have the right to do what they want. It’s their choice if they want to have a kid or not.

proposal second draft Obesity

Obesity

Fast food restaurant are everywhere in todays society. People in today’s society rush so they hardly have time to prepare a meal. Back when our mothers were young food had to be prepared. Today my mother sometimes gets tired from work so we order out. I’m a student in college and sometimes I don’t have time to go home to eat before work, so I go to a fast food place for dinner. I’m not the only one; even the nurses at my job are always on the run.  Despite the convince, some fast food restaurants seem to be a good thing, but its killing us. Obesity is literally a growing problem in our society today.

       Every time we buy something from a fast food place or we buy something for our kids we need to think about what we are doing for our bodies and what we are setting  up for the future. There has been a dramatic increase of obesity rates. Obesity is the excess of body fat, which you get from eating fatty foods, which is mostly sold at fast food restaurants. When someone is obese or is overweight there are a lot of health complications that come along with that. “The statistics showed that more than 35% of U.S. adults (78 million people) are obese, defined as having a body mass index of 30% or greater. That is similar to the 2005-06 rates. Calculated as weight in kilograms divided by height in meters squared, the BMI is not a perfect measure of fatness but is still viewed as the gold standard in assessing population-wide trends.” Being overweight you are likely to have heart disease or have a stroke, high blood pressure, diabetes, cancer, gallbladder and gallstones, osteoporosis, gout, and also apnea is common for overweight people and asthma.

            Some people are naturally overweight. Some people it is genetic thing, but having fast food restaurants around them doesn’t help. Even for someone who is trying to lose weight, it is hard because all around you there are fast food places which has food you enjoy. Of course there are surgery’s that can be done to lose weight, but it is expensive and not everyone can do it. Also some people have family to take care of, and have work so they can’t afford to take time out of work.

            I think that in a community there should be less fast food restaurants. But then again there are some people who don’t care about their weight. There are a lot of things that people can do to lose weight for example gyms and zumba classes around the area and there are other programs. Some people just need someone to push them and tell that person that they can do it like give those pointers on how to accomplish their weight loss goals. Also I think that maybe they can make healthier food restaurants.

             A lot of people would benefit from this because everyone wants to have that perfect bodies, everyone wants to be healthy and live to see old age. I don’t think people would want to have all these heart problems at the age of 30, because they made bad decisions on what they are going to eat. I understand some people try to lose weight but then they give up because they don’t see results right away, but they can’t be like that because not everything happens so fast. But I think if they had a person to motivate them is would be different and they wouldn’t quit.

Post write

I feel very strong about this paper because obesity is a very big topic in today’s society.

How do you feel about obesity?

proposal first draft

Obesity

Fast food restaurant are everywhere know a days. People know a day’s rush so they hardly have time to make food, or even make lunch.  It’s not like back then when women would stay home and makes food for their families.im a student in college and sometimes I don’t have time to go home to eat before work so I go to a fast food place to get food. Or even the nurses at my job, they are always on the run so they always grab something quick to eat. Even sometimes my mom is tired from work that she doesn’t want to cook so we order out sometimes. No matter what it is we are always getting food from fast food places. So fast food restaurants today’s world seem to be a good thing, but what we don’t realize is that it’s not good for our bodies and we are just spending money. Obesity is an increasing problem in our society today.

       Every time we buy something from a fast food place or we buy something for our kids we need to think about what we are doing for our bodies and what we are setting  up for the future. There has been a dramatic increase of obesity rates. Obesity is the excess of body fat, which you get from eating fatty foods, which is mostly sold at fast food restaurants. When someone is obsessed or is overweight there are a lot of health complications that come along with that. “The statistics showed that more than 35% of U.S. adults (78 million people) are obese, defined as having a body mass index of 30% or greater. That is similar to the 2005-06 rates. Calculated as weight in kilograms divided by height in meters squared, the BMI is not a perfect measure of fatness but is still viewed as the gold standard in assessing population-wide trends.” Being overweight you are likely to have heart disease or have a stroke, you are more likely to have high blood pressure, diabetes, cancer, gallbladder and gallstones, osteoporosis, gout, and also apnea is common for overweight people and asthma.

            Some people are naturally overweight. Some people it is genetic thing, but having fast food restaurants around them doesn’t help. Even for someone who is trying to lose weight, it is hard because all around you there are fast food places which has food you enjoy. Of course there are surgery’s that can be done to lose weight, but it is expensive and not everyone can do it. Also some people have family to take care of, and have work so they can’t afford to take time out of work.

            I think that in a community there should be less fast food restaurants. But then again there are some people who don’t care about their weight. There are a lot of things that people can do to lose weight for example gyms and zumba classes around the area and there are other programs. Some people just need someone to push them and tell that person that they can do it like give those pointers on how to accomplish their weight loss goals. Also I think that maybe they can make healthier food restaurants.

             A lot of people would benefit from this because everyone wants to have that perfect bodies, everyone wants to be healthy and live to see old age. I don’t think people would want to have all these heart problems at the age of 30, because they made bad decisions on what they are going to eat.  Yeah people try to lose weight but then they give up because they don’t see results right away, but they can’t be like that because not everything happens so fast. But I think if they had a person to motivate them is would be different and they wouldn’t quit.

Post write

I feel very strong about this paper because obesity is a very big issue.