profile 2nd draft

Krystal Bettencourt

The Person I look up to.

            Throughout life people go through experiences. Yeah some are planned and carefully organized, but some happen because it’s meant to happen. But some stick with us and some we live and learn from. A Portuguese man, that came here from the Azores’ that didn’t know much English. That is a hard worker, respectful, kind, brave, and loving is the person I look up to, my dad.

        Ever since I could remember my dad has worked is but off for everything he has to day. He said “I have been working since the age of 16; I never went to school your grandfather had me working with the cows and in the fields planting food.” And I believe what he says because my grandmother used to tell me stories. My father never stops he’s always doing something. The thing he says all the time is “As long as I can do it, I will do it.

         Even though my father wasn’t here legally he still worked. He would do side job for people he knew after work or even on the weekends. I use to get upset because my brother and I would hardly see my father because he would always be working. But then he got married to my mother and he became legal here in the United States.

        After being here for so long and working so hard like he does my father has his own business. He does construction. He does everything; well to me I think so. He can build a house, he does concrete, and he always has his own plowing business to for the snow.

        One day my dad was working and was cutting wood on a table saw and he cut his finger. My is so brave that he tied cloth around his finger and took himself to the ER. When he got there the doctor said that he was crazy bringing himself. My father cut his middle finger and half of it was hanging off. But not once did I see my father cry. But I was crying because I was nervous and scared and I will never forget what my dad told me he said “Krystal don’t worry dad is fine this is nothing, it’s just a little thing, I’ll be back to work in a few days.” And he was right, not even week goes by and there’s my dad at work with his workers.

        Not once didn’t I ever here him complain about anything. He never complained about his finger hurting or how his finger never went back to normal. Till this day he doesn’t complain. He was always positive about everything. He never lets anything get to him just like he said “In one ear out the other”. This man is brave, loving, respectful, hard worker, and had a lot of courage. This is why my father is the person I look up too and I’m not ashamed to say it.

post write

didnt really know what needed work on because didnt get my peer review.

Profile first draft and post write

Krystal Bettencourt

The Person I look up to.

            Throughout life people go through experiences. Yeah some are planned and carefully organized, but some happen because it’s meant to happen. But some stick with us and some we live and learn from. A Portuguese man, that came here from the Azores’ that didn’t know much English. That is a hard worker, respectful, kind, brave, and loving is the person I look up to, my dad.

        Ever since I could remember my dad has worked is but off for everything he has to day. He said “I have been working since the age of 16; I never went to school your grandfather had me working with the cows and in the fields planting food.” And I believe what he says because my grandmother used to tell me stories. My father never stops he’s always doing something. The thing he says all the time is “As long as I can do it, I will do it.

         Even though my father wasn’t here legally he still worked. He would do side job for people he knew after work or even on the weekends. I use to get upset because my brother and I would hardly see my father because he would always be working. But then he got married to my mother and he became legal here in the United States.

        After being here for so long and working so hard like he does my father has his own business. He does construction. He does everything; well to me I think so. He can build a house, he does concrete, and he always has his own plowing business to for the snow.

        One day my dad was working and was cutting wood on a table saw and he cut his finger. My is so brave that he tied cloth around his finger and took himself to the ER. When he got there the doctor said that he was crazy bringing himself. My father cut his middle finger and half of it was hanging off. But not once did I see my father cry. But I was crying because I was nervous and scared and I will never forget what my dad told me he said “Krystal don’t worry dad is fine this is nothing, it’s just a little thing, I’ll be back to work in a few days.” And he was right, not even week goes by and there’s my dad at work with his workers.

        Not once didn’t I ever here him complain about anything. He never complained about his finger hurting or how his finger never went back to normal. Till this day he doesn’t complain. He was always positive about everything. He never lets anything get to him just like he said “In one ear out the other”. This man is brave, loving, respectful, hard worker, and had a lot of courage. This is why my father is the person I look up too and I’m not ashamed to say it.

Post Write

I feel very strong about this piece of work because my father is someone special to me. There is no one who can compare to him. He is one person I can look up to because he came here with nothing and now has his own business and is doing well for himself and his family.