Sunday, April 8, 2012

proposal second draft Obesity




Obesity



Fast food restaurant are everywhere in todays society. People in today’s society rush so they hardly have time to prepare a meal. Back when our mothers were young food had to be prepared. Today my mother sometimes gets tired from work so we order out. I’m a student in college and sometimes I don’t have time to go home to eat before work, so I go to a fast food place for dinner. I’m not the only one; even the nurses at my job are always on the run.  Despite the convince, some fast food restaurants seem to be a good thing, but its killing us. Obesity is literally a growing problem in our society today.

       Every time we buy something from a fast food place or we buy something for our kids we need to think about what we are doing for our bodies and what we are setting  up for the future. There has been a dramatic increase of obesity rates. Obesity is the excess of body fat, which you get from eating fatty foods, which is mostly sold at fast food restaurants. When someone is obese or is overweight there are a lot of health complications that come along with that. “The statistics showed that more than 35% of U.S. adults (78 million people) are obese, defined as having a body mass index of 30% or greater. That is similar to the 2005-06 rates. Calculated as weight in kilograms divided by height in meters squared, the BMI is not a perfect measure of fatness but is still viewed as the gold standard in assessing population-wide trends.” Being overweight you are likely to have heart disease or have a stroke, high blood pressure, diabetes, cancer, gallbladder and gallstones, osteoporosis, gout, and also apnea is common for overweight people and asthma.

            Some people are naturally overweight. Some people it is genetic thing, but having fast food restaurants around them doesn’t help. Even for someone who is trying to lose weight, it is hard because all around you there are fast food places which has food you enjoy. Of course there are surgery’s that can be done to lose weight, but it is expensive and not everyone can do it. Also some people have family to take care of, and have work so they can’t afford to take time out of work.

            I think that in a community there should be less fast food restaurants. But then again there are some people who don’t care about their weight. There are a lot of things that people can do to lose weight for example gyms and zumba classes around the area and there are other programs. Some people just need someone to push them and tell that person that they can do it like give those pointers on how to accomplish their weight loss goals. Also I think that maybe they can make healthier food restaurants.

             A lot of people would benefit from this because everyone wants to have that perfect bodies, everyone wants to be healthy and live to see old age. I don’t think people would want to have all these heart problems at the age of 30, because they made bad decisions on what they are going to eat. I understand some people try to lose weight but then they give up because they don’t see results right away, but they can’t be like that because not everything happens so fast. But I think if they had a person to motivate them is would be different and they wouldn’t quit.



Post write

I feel very strong about this paper because obesity is a very big topic in today’s society.

How do you feel about obesity?

2 comments:

  1. Hi Krystal:

    While I thought for a moment that your subject was the problem of eating healthy foods in a fast paced world, you seem also to be interested in the problem of obesity. They're related but really two different subject, right?

    You do a good job of presenting the seriousness of obesity, although I can't tell how you use sources since full information isn't provided in MLA style, as required.

    I'm also not certain as to your audience here, and that affects the matter of your solutions, which seem to need a slower and more focused development.Put as much emphasis on solutions as on the problem, okay?

    no Work Cited?

    apostrophe? todays society

    typo/word choice? Despite the convince

    please cite your source: “The statistics showed that more than 35% of U.S. adults (78 million people) are obese, defined as having a body mass index of 30% or greater. That is similar to the 2005-06 rates. Calculated as weight in kilograms divided by height in meters squared, the BMI is not a perfect measure of fatness but is still viewed as the gold standard in assessing population-wide trend

    typo? Some people it is genetic t

    who is your intended reader? ause all around you

    edit for punctuation: surgery’s

    comma splice: bodies, everyone

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  2. i was trying to go for the obesity not the fast food. I totally forgot to site my source. also i need to double read my essays.

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